<p>Hi i wrote one essay but I’ve never wrotten english essay before and my english is not so good 
its a very short but enough for me so i was wondering if anyone can take a look and tell me have i hot any grammar or spelling mistakes.</p>
<p>Thanks in advance.</p>
<p>College and university education should be free all students fully financed by the goverment ?</p>
<p>Everyone would be well-educated.Our country would be better place,more attractive place to live if the most people are well-educated.For that reason we would become a world leader due to our well-educated society.(e.g Japan`s society)
Unfortunately almost every college or university has so many taxes for their students.That is thue because they have also a lot of expenses:Teachers need to be paid,textbooks,etc.This bills are different around the world.For instance in Bulgaria one student per year must pay around sixty to three hundred dollars but in the United States the same student minimum must pay ten thousand dollars per year.Do you see this difference ? So I will ask you one simple question: If colleges and universitys are free for all students,what will be the quality of education then ? Especially for me I do not think the education quality would lessan.I will give you one example:In Norway colleges are free and as far as I can see they are doing fine academically. I beleive colleges should be funded for all.
If the govermet financed all our education that will be great because there are so many smart people who doesnt have enough money to pay their education.Exactly this is so tragically in this case. So what can be done?
Lower interest rates would help. Anyone reading these letters can see how fast an interest rate of eight or nine percent drives up a person’s debt.
Interest rates are determined in Washington where the people who profit off these arrangements have lobbyists to take care of them and where students do not. What about that?
Just now the streets of the cities of France are choked with demonstrating students and other young people pressuring the government on a law vital to them. The streets of America are empty of demonstrating students.
In the short run, some college bound students can learn to game the system. Nobody who knows the ropes pays list price for school. Good guidance counselors can show people how to get a good education at a low cost, but how many schools have counselors? And how good are they?<br>
In the long run, which is not far away, young people must organize or else. Or else school debt, bad water, bad air, lots of things you can’t snap your fingers and dance too.</p>
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<p>just giving you a heads up dude…</p>
<p>anyway…changes…
probably want to change the first would to should…if this is an argumentative essay…you might wanna remove/change all those rhetorical questions…rhetorical questions lessen the effectiveness of argumentative essay(assuming your working in an AP like format…if your doing an editorial…then its fine)</p>
<p>hey, please dont post your essays up here…</p>
<p>Thanks gumba for your advice.
btw: - None will copy my essay bacause its not good 
so i dont care about this …
If someone copy this i will be happy seriously.</p>
<p>yes, but if you send anything related to college, you will be accused of plagiarism… so, just be careful thats all</p>
<p>yea i know and again thanks for your advices</p>
<p>Here’s one sentence reworked
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<p>Our country would be a more attractive place to live if the majority of its citizens were well-educated. For example, Japan has [insert specific detail about Japan here].</p>
<p>I see Ok i will put some new things here
Thanks</p>
<p>Is this a college admissions essay or something else?</p>
<p>It’s a good first-try for a non-native English speaker, but to sound adequate to a native speaker you will have to revise it heavily.</p>
<p>First, you will want to ensure that it flows logically. You can do this in your native language first. It seems that some of your arguments are not well backed up by evidence or reasoning (e.g., your anecdotal evidence about ‘Norway’s schools not failing even though they are free’ does not seem sufficient to back up your argument without including how Norway actually pays for education).</p>
<p>After you do that, you will be able to go back and translate into English again. This will probably be easier, since a stronger logical progression will make the translation more natural.</p>
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