"The tale of Mr. Vandal" My common app essay

<p>Forgive some errors in my language…I am a Chinese stundent.</p>

<p>Among his classmates, Mr. Vandal is a truly eccentric man. He has been known as a skeptic and rule-breaker. His love of debate and critical thinking earned him the comically translated nick name “Mr. Vandal.” “We NEED NOT follow the hidden rule “one should only make positive remark on meetings or seminars”. Once we have question or different opinion, we have to speak out; this is self-evident.”He always says.</p>

<p>Everyone can recall many of his anecdotes. </p>

<p>Anecdote 1
“Sir, I believe your approach was very absolute and inaccurate.” Without even a single sight, everyone knew it was Mr. Vandal speaking. During a seminar on Confucian philosophy, Mr. Vandal was questioning a celebrated scholar who argued that "we should befriend our betters but never our inferiors.” while others were complementing the scholars’ theories to show “good manners”. Regardless to others’ stupefaction to the breaking of the mood, Mr. Vandal continued: “If we only befriend our betters for their being superior, we assume the position of inferiority and, according to your absolutism, our betters would never deign to befriend us. People are equal and that society would not survive very long if it is merely divided in to absolute group like ‘betters’ and ‘inferiors’”. …Like this case, Mr. Vandal’s questionings are omnipresent in every seminar. </p>

<p>Anecdote 2
“I keep thinking, Mr. Vice Minister,” Mr. Vandal’s voice appeared behind the vice Minister of China Statistic Bureau, who had given a speech about economy to our school students and was about to leave, “that your speech was filled with professional idiom and concept which were so distant from our ordinary life that our school dissuaded us from asking questions. Thus I advice, Sir, that you tell us something imminent: what academic preparation should we middle school students make if we were to study economy in college?” Again, the Vice Minister’s entourage, our principal, knew that Mr. Vandal not only broke school’s rule “Better not to ask questions in case of appearing amateurish”, but also questioned prestigious minister’s speech face to face without any fear. </p>

<p>Besides, Mr. Vandal wrote” good writing is an articulation of one’s own creativity, not a stitching together of borrowed fragments” on his assignment when our teacher asked us to begin compiling a notebook of citable quotes and passages. He sharply claimed “the garbled, muddy sound quality of our school’s P.A announcements was seen as a joke” while others were speaking ingratiatingly to the principal about their achievements at school meeting. He seemed “enjoy” questioning everything, from what he called “trite” theories in textbooks to conventional ways of behaving. </p>

<p>As you may assume, ‘Mr. Vandal’ is me. Others always characterized that I questioned everything because I wanted to be “funny” or to “show off”. However, unlike what they said, I have my own reason of being who I am.</p>

<p>I deeply value our country’s most inspirational historical era, the May 4th Era, which marked the beginning of the modern Chinese Renaissance. Student demonstrations against the government sparked a long-suppressed hunger among Chinese youth nationwide to “think, speak and act independently.” I took this statement as my motto. Alas, the spirit that was the heart of this era has already departed. Today, a Chinese youth’s entire academic life is based on preparation for exams; students are not trained to think independently but to adhere simply to the maxim: “The students’ task is to study.” I wanted to resurrect the spirit of May 4th. </p>

<p>But I was not, as many claimed, “the vandal”. The youth of the May 4th Movement were not at all skeptics of the old world, but innovators of new, more humanitarian China. My skepticism towards convention and regulation stems, also, from a need to CREATE rather than to destroy. Therefore, I organized a volunteer group called the Smiling Society which was designed to take student out of the Ivory Tower to under-privileged children of migrant workers. During an interview with CCTV, I held that by inspiring a group of school students to actively help and identify with people truly in need, we were making progress on our respective roads to self discovery. I knew I broke the rule that “Students’ task is to study”, but I also knew I was CREATING a path to a social scope. </p>

<p>Among my classmates, I am truly an eccentric man; they call me “Mr. Vandal. But I am ‘Mr. pursuer-of-my-own-way’ rather than ‘Mr. Vandal’. I question, therefore learn. I break rules, therefore I discover the spirit of youth. I come to be my true self, therefore I create my own path. This is who I am: Mr. Vandal, a.k.a, Mr. Creator-of-a-new-way.</p>

<p>You certainly caught my interest, and your personality comes through. Definitely have someone check the English. Some of the words you are using aren’t being used idiomatically. e.g, “Thus I advice, Sir, that you tell us something imminent” I think you mean “My advice, sir is that you tell us something relevant to us.”</p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

<p>ΛΛIs this your original idea?Because I remember reading an essay on another forum with the exact same title and similar introduction.Or maybe you are the same person?the website is essayforum.com.</p>

<p>!^^Yes!I posted my essay on essayforum. This is my original essay~</p>

<p>other suggestions?I’m applying for UPenn–does my personality fit Upenn?</p>

<p>I can almost guarantee that someone will steal this essay.</p>

<p>Does that mean…my essay’s great and eye-catching?</p>

<p>I didn’t even read it. It means that you are not sagacious in going around and posting it on the internet.</p>

<p>This is a brilliant essay… I mean it.</p>

<p>But, yes you have to correct the errors in the English used.</p>

<p>Thank you HelpWithSchools.I won’t post it on other forum anymore.It is not sagacious.</p>

<p>Oh……rejected by Upenn……may be my traits dont fit?</p>