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College Essays
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<p>SUMMER CAMP
I am frustrated

  1. I need more to elaborate on than just this one miniscule experience; I need something else to support my idea that I am not content with the role that has been predetermined for me as a middle child in a family of five.
  2. I haven’t done anything in my four years of high school that make me a more worthy college candidate than anyone else in my class. I do not stand out and have no “special” or different experience to make me appear more “qualified” or whatever they want to hear.
  3. I do not want to write filler or a load of (bs), I do not want an essay full of words. I want to write something that admissions officers will actually look at and be impressed with, intrigued by, and interested in me for.
  4. I know what they want to hear and I know how to put it on paper, I just do not know what to say. Breaking out of the shell of family dynamics can only take me so far in my paper; I need something else to add to my central idea of the paper or some evidence that it is not a load of (bs). I want to prove that what I am trying to write about is real but I just do not know how to at this point.</p>
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<p>Write about something you like. My grandfather and I like to go see NHRA drag racing, so I wrote about that. You are talking about your essay topic right?</p>

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<p>Sit down and brainstorm topics. What are you passionate about? What person has been important to you? What was a life-changing experience? Or a seemingly small experience that made you think or look at something differently? What have you done that was hard? What have you contributed to your community? What have you created? </p>

<p>You don’t have to come up with some heavy-duty topic. My D (not a dance major) wrote about how her dance teacher inspired and challenged her to be a better dancer. She loves dance and she loves the teacher, and that’s what shined through on the essay. Find something you can writing shiningly about.</p>

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<p>Lasma gives great advice. reading your comments morgan, it appears to me that your chosen topic isn’t that clear or compelling to begin with – otherwise it’d be quite easy for you to speak about it for one page more or less.</p>

<p>I recommend the following:
[Essays</a>, Admission Information, Undergraduate Admission, U.Va.](<a href=“http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html]Essays”>http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html)</p>