Too depressing for a Princeton short essay?

Colleges & Universities Princeton University
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<p>Ahhh, I am freaking out. </p>

<p>For this essay question…</p>

<p>“The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its own reason for existing. One cannot help but be in awe when one contemplates the mysteries of eternity, of life, or the marvelous structure of reality. It is enough if one tries to comprehend only a little of this mystery every day.” -Albert Einstein; Write about one experience or aspect of the world that has engaged your curiosity or inspired awe in you.</p>

<p>I wrote about the demise of our planet and the bleak future of mankind. Is this too depressing for admissions officers to read? I don’t want them to think I constantly ponder death and the unknowability of our universe, but the truth is, it DOES capture my imagination.</p>

<p>Does anyone want to give it a read and give me suggestions on how to make it sound LESS morbid? lol</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>haha it might be a bit depressing…</p>

<p>i guess it depends how you write it; i would say it can either be really good or really bad</p>

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<p>Could you maybe give it a read and tell me which of the two it is?
lol</p>

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<p>I’ll be glad to read it. I wrote about on star/universe related theme as well.</p>

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<p>sure, just PM it to me</p>

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<p>actually it wouldnt be too bad of a topic you know…</p>

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<p>its about entropy and the heat death of the universe isn’t it? PM to me if you like. I once did a project on that.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, pm me.</p>

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<p>entropy also results in reassemblance of energy given enough time and other energy put in… example (broken watch in a box… shake it long enough = fixed watch) why be depressed when there’s that 1/100000000… shot to long for?</p>

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<p>i wrote about an AA meeting i went to with my dad</p>

<p>not exactly uplifting</p>

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<p>It sounds like the kind of essay that most experts recommend you steer away from - most admissions officers are not going to want to hear a high schooler expounding on the meaning of life and the demise of the planet… However, if you did a good job with it then it should be fine. </p>

<p>PM it to me so I can give you a less vague answer.</p>

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<p>hey i wrote mine about music.
it came from inside me
i wrote how music affects people and tried to add a little profundity to it.
i think i could have done a better job with that title.
if you wrote about stars and universe, dont bust in too much scientific jargon. adcoms dont like that…coz they arent scientists or professors.
if you want to make an impression that you know more about science than an average guy, try to write that without saying too much technical stuffs.</p>

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<p>i almost wrote that essay, but then took another one.</p>

<p>yet, it almost has the same theme as another essay i wrote, but i discussed the sorry state of my contemporaries in a media-dominated society (i believe it was in the ‘talents and convictions’ essay.)</p>

<p>my personal fav, however, is when i wrote about the Y2K scare/chaos for the historical event essay. true, it only encompassed a bit of the 90s, but i thought it was creative and rather well written nonetheless.</p>

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<p>i wrote about my grandfather, and my chem teacher lighting up his sleeve, why do all mine sound too informal :p</p>