too many things going on here?

College Essays
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<p>Hi. This is my first thread on CC.</p>

<p>Basically i did a rough draft of my essay. and i think i may have too many things and therefor not going into each enough. basically i start off with an experience and then another and then how that relates to another experience.</p>

<p>too many things???</p>

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<p>I think it may depend on how the transitions are done and also on how many experiences you’re talking about here. Three may work well. Eight? Not so much. If the transitions work, the essay will work. Have a teacher read it and ask if he thought it was all over the board or if it was smooth.</p>

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<p>thanks physicsnut1. will do so and ask a teacher!</p>