Transfer/Cornell Essay Feedback

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<p>Hello. I’m applying to AAP for the BFA and I want to declare the BA/BFA option.
In high-school, my grades were a bit under par. I believe my GPA was a 2.97, right now at Ithaca College I have a 4.0. I also have a portfolio but it consist mostly of digital 3D art, computer drawings, and digital photography. No drawings or sketches as I cant draw too well. So my essay has to strong to win over my other traits. Im a freshman at Ithaca College, applying for fall 2009.</p>

<p>I have both the common app transfer essay and the why cornell supplement essay. Any critique or help would be greatly appreciate</p>

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<p>anyone?..</p>

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<p>Sure, I’ll read it when I get a chance</p>

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<p>if you’re worried about people stealing your essay feel free to email me at my school account… but I’d prefer a pm</p>

<p><a href=“mailto:sxkamboj@ucdavis.edu”>sxkamboj@ucdavis.edu</a></p>

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<p>I’ll read it if you want.</p>