<p>So here it goes, I found a random prompt online and wrote this essay in around 30 minutes (I have a 504 plan so I get 12 extra minutes). I decided to not take a single side on a, in my opinion, bad essay question. Can you tell me what I did right, what I did wrong, and If i could in the future on an actual SAT go both ways? If you help me out, it would really help me in the future on SAT’s, thanks alot. </p>
<p>1.Prompt:
“That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly. It is dearness only which gives everything its value.”</p>
<p>Thomas Paine</p>
<p>Assignment:
Do we value only what we struggle for? Plan your response, and then write an essay to explain your views on this issue. Be sure to support your position with specific points and examples. (You may use personal examples or examples from your reading, observations, or, knowledge of subjects such as history, literature, science.) </p>
<p>Essay:</p>
<p>A dissertation would normally start with a thesis, taking a side on the subject, which would then segue into 2 paragraphs with some clever anecdotes. However, it would do no justice to humanity to make an objective statement on something that philosophers could spend their lifetime arguing over. There are two sides of the spectrum on a subject like this one. So with respect I will try to argue how we sometimes want what we cant have, but sometimes stay happy with what we do have, not needing more.</p>
<pre><code>Wings, a song by Irish Rapper and Spoken word Poet Macklemore, demonstates humanities resolve to own something that they could otherwise not have. In wings that certain something was a pair of Nike sneakers, which costed a handsome amount of money. His exact words are, We want what we cant have, a commodity makes us want it. So exclusive, damn, I just got to flaunt it Although it is just a quote from a song, it is the rappers reflection on his ideology as a child. How he gave in to this system of wanting something that he couldnt afford. Because yes, we do want something we cant have, because we always want to be the best we can be. We want to be better than our peers, and able to have things to feel empowered. When we see something superior to ourselves, we feel the urge to meet standards by owning it.
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<p>Now this is not the case 100% of the time. After all, I only gave a single quote to show that we do want things we struggle for. Face it; we all have certain somethings we dream about as kids. In my case, getting a dog was something I always wanted. On my 10th birthday, my parents decided to buy me one. After struggling with chores for 4 years, I had earned it. So Did my desire for it lessen when I did have it? Not at all. In fact, it only grew stronger as I bonded with it. A sentient being is different than an inorganic object. When we can truly bond with something, its value never lowers. We only cherish it more with each passing day. </p>
<p>It would be unfair for me to try and take a single side on a matter like this, because there is no single side. How can I, a 16 year old, determine that humanity only values what it struggles for? It would be unfair for me to make an objective statement on this, so I can only do my best to show why there is no one answer.</p>