UC app essay on tolerance. Interesting I thought but is it good enough????

<p>I need an honest, blunt critic to check it out and give me feedback. You are more than welcome to murder it with suggestions!
Please help! i am in desperate need!</p>

<p>Anyone? please! i would really appreciated it!!</p>

<p>send it over !! !!!</p>

<p>I’ll take a look at it. pm it over.</p>