@bbybear I spent my first paragraph talking about communuty/political activities/activism I had been a part of since I sent in my apps.
My second paragraph was where I spent the most words and time. I mentioned my upcoming summer internship, how I finished my major prerequisites in the fall, an upper division prerequisite in the winter and the fact that I went out of my way to attend another community college to finish another major prerequisite. Then I discussed about my courses and how I took a lot of non major or Igetc required courses just for fun and how those tied in with my major.
In my third paragraph I spoke about specific Cal courses and programs I was interested in. Why I wanted to go to Cal over any other school because of what made their program for my major unique.
My conclusion paragraph was a short blurb about why and what about Cal I loved.
That was my essay in a nutshell. How did you structure and write your essay?