UC Essay #2 help to make last fixes

<p>Could you proofread my essay and point some fixtures that need to be made. Thanks.
“Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?” </p>

<p>A clock is ticking on the wall, counting the last ten minutes to submit our application. Something went wrong- the screen of the application is blank and all seems completely ruined for our team. The manager announces that the presentation of apps is upcoming in five minutes, we still can not find the bug, so we are trying to find our mistake by randomly changing code. Luckily, we find out what is wrong and submit our final application just couple of minutes before the final deadline. The relief and joyfulness in my face is so big that I forget to prepare my speech for presenting our application. Despite that, the presentation succeeds and everyone is happy with our result.</p>

<p>These were the moments from the event “Wix Hackathon”, in which me and my friends participated in developing the Skype Widget for Wix App store. We were the youngest participants there. Nevertheless, we proved that we can make applications as well as graduates of computer science. Creating that application was not something like a big accomplishment for me, but seeing Wix employees who congratulated and encouraged us telling that despite of being very young as well as other more professional participants and ensured us that couple of years later we will hopefully create own startups. It really made me feel proud of our work.</p>

<p>When I registered to the Wix Hackathon, I had a small background in programming, learned in school or at home - basics C++, Java, HTML and CSS. However,In the event we had to create a web application and no one from my team had had a background in web development before.In the period of two days, during which we coded the application, I possessed an much wider understanding on creating web applications than I could learn in a month if studying by myself. Our team was consisted from only three persons so I had a great chance to express myself in different areas: from coding the application to marketing it and creating its logo. The period of two days was a really short time for developing an application, so we had to rush all the time, with nearly no breaks at all. The constant hurry and adrenaline really motivated me to try harder and achieve what firstly seemed to be almost impossible - to create a full working application. Luckily, I achieved my goal and I felt really proud of it.</p>

<p>I find this quite parallel to my life. I always try to create goals, which are made of challenges to complete and I love working forwards achieving them. When I read or hear about new technologies, I always try experimenting with them in spite of that I am not well knowledgeable about them. Teamwork is also very important for me, because there people complement each other, and by doing that they can achieve significant results.</p>

<p>Paragraph one: should be “just a couple of minutes” —
the relief and joyful ness… Sentence is awkward.</p>

<p>I fixed that sentence, thank you!</p>