UC essay: Need someone critical.

College Essays
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<p>About a month ago I had to write a draft of my Uc personal statements for a program at UCB (experience Berkeley). It was reviewed by the admissions office, and they said they liked it, but I don’t fully trust what they say; I have a feeling that they were being nice to keep the participants motivated…</p>

<p>Can someone read my two UC personal statements; when I re-read it i hate it. I have no idea where to start to refine it.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>sure. i will read and edit it.</p>

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<p>Anyone else?</p>

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<p>Sure I would be glad to!</p>

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<p>I would be happy to. =]</p>

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<p>i’ll read them!</p>

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<p>i’ll be happy to read them! i actually just wrote mine haha</p>

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<p>i would like to read it; ive written a few drafts myself actually</p>

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<p>I’ll give feedback. Just PM me :)</p>

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<p>i’ll be happy to read them :)</p>

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<p>PM. Include prompt.</p>

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<p>pm me I will be read it and give you a feedback</p>