Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. You can type directly into the box, or you can paste text from another source. (250-650 words)
The reason why I am transferring to a University this year is because I want to further my education in a well established institution so that I may learn in further detail, how to excel in my field of study, business administration. My goal is to become a successful, well rounded, and respected individual in my intended field and community, and I understand that I need help from a University which has been historically known to breed such people in order to accomplish my intended goal. I am a firm believer that luck does not exist, but those who seize opportunity are the people considered to be lucky. For that reason I want to go into a University which provides its’ students, as well as alumni, an unlimited amount of opportunity so that I may further mold myself into the person I strive to be several years from today. I am the first person in my family to attend college in the United States and although my family has shown what hard work and perseverance can lead to, they have also exhibited how a strong education from a University prepares a person for life outside of college. My family has shown me all of the mistakes and hardships they had to endure to get to where they are, as well as all of the important lessons they had to learn in order to become successful in their respected fields of business. Most of the things that I was shown, I had learned from the classes I had taken while in community college already. I have seen, first hand, what a proper education can do and how well it prepares a person for any field in life, which is why I want to make sure I go to the right University that I believe best suits my intentions.
USC students are known to be involved. Briefly describe a non-academic pursuit (such as service to community or family, a club or sport, or work, etc.,) that best illustrates who you are, and why it is important to you. (250 word limit)
Although I have partaken in several volunteer activities throughout my time in high school and college, the one activity that helped shape me as a person and represented who I am best the time I spent as a youth advisor at St. Peters church. As a youth myself, I was not very social with my peers as a result of the difficult measures that I grew up in, and this gave me the opportunity to bond with the children of my heritage and learn more about them. The reason why my position as a youth leader is extremely important to me is because allowed me to open up more as a person and teach and aid the children I worked with to move forward in the right direction. I have always been known to be a person who helps people in need of aid, so when I was given the chance to educate the children about life and their heritage through activities such as sports and school work, I was flattered. My position at the church not only disciplined me on how to be a leader, but it also allowed me to go back in time and enjoy the childhood that I never really had the opportunity to grasp.
Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections. (250 word limit)
When I was just thirteen years old, the first iPhone came out, dominating the consumer electronics market. While most people looked at this phone as a must have piece of technology, I saw a potential to make a healthy profit on a trending new market. After studying the used iPhone market and determining the average price these phones would sell for, I took to the internet, scouring for hours to acquire phones for low prices. I would contact sellers, negotiate a selling price well under current market value, and sell the phones for a profit. Ever since then I’ve known that my intended field of study is business, hence the reason why it is my first choice of study. The USC Marshall School of Business is known to be one of the top business schools in the United States, and I believe it is the perfect institute for me to maximize my skills and have a successful future as an entrepreneur. The degree I receive from USC will allow me to maximize my knowledge and assist me in achieving my future goals in life.
Get a person with a job in writing (such as a teacher) to check the grammar in your submission. I would also recommend sprucing up the diction you’ve used in your transfer essay. Good luck!
Just as the person before me said, I think the strongest thing to help your essay first would be cleaning up grammar and sentence structure.
I highly recommend that you use an editing service such as gurufi for review and improvement. The turnaround at Gurufi is amazing and editors (specifically Brian) do an impeccable job!
You weren’t really specific about how you plan to pursue your interests at USC… Remember, they want to accept students who genuinely want to go there and have done their research on the various programs USC has to offer and you didn’t name any.
