<p>Consider something in your life you think goes unnoticed and write about why it’s important to you.</p>
<pre><code>I sit in class and observe. I observe the postures and facial expressions of my lackadaisical peers, slouched in their chairs, eyes half open, giving little attentiveness to the amazing opportunity that lies right before their eyes; the opportunity to learn. To fill their minds with insightful knowledge of a specific topic. This opportunity is one that not all, but many students take for granted. Coming from a private school it is even more shocking to see students not take full advantage of the sacrifices their parents are making for them. I am by no means a perfect student, but when it comes to paying attention in class and valuing the lessons being taught, I see no reason not to. It is almost as if we live in a sort of regressive state, where some people consider it boring to be a knowledgeable member of society. Sadly, the majority of teenagers today are wrapped up in superficial matters such as celebrity gossip. Often forgotten is the simple, yet powerful fact that todays youth is tomorrows future, and with modern technology it is easier now more than ever to become educated. Is it possible for anyone to become whoever they want to be, regardless of race, creed, color, or circumstance, and to me that is the greatest fact of the United States. The youth as a whole needs to stray away from its loathsome view of education, and embrace the opportunity their ancestors before them may not have had. Many students feel as if they are forced to go to school, when in reality they are being gifted the opportunity to better themselves. I will be the first to admit that I have not always fully valued my education. However, as I have matured throughout high school the power of knowledge has grown more evident to me day by day. Now I try to get the most out my experiences in the classroom everyday, and I cannot wait to see the amazing learning opportunities I am presented with as I go off to college.
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<p>I also feel as if I didn’t completely answer the question in regards as to why it is important to me.</p>
<p>Yes, too arrogant. </p>
<p>“Coming from a private school it is even more shocking to see students not take full advantage of the sacrifices their parents are making for them.”</p>
<p>This sentence in particular is a problem. You sound privileged.</p>
<p>You’re not really examining why you think education goes unnoticed. You’re complaining about your schoolmates. This topic might work if you could write a more nuanced take on why education is disregarded in modern America. As it is, it’s one long complaint. And it’s not really saying anything good about you.</p>
<p>Thank you, I did feel like a ****** writing this lol.</p>
<p>You do sound a bit arrogant Michael, and it’s great that you DID realize this fact while writing the essay. It also sounds like you’re a bit antisocial ! (lol). </p>
<p>Adboards don’t just want you to be a lonely student crouched up in the classroom for the entire day. They want you to be proactive , intuitive and innovative.
If you had hinted something like, you yourself have realized the crux of the matter and you are ready to make the others see, what they do not notice( in this case, education) , I think you would fit better into the profile of the rainbow-hugging, peace loving hippies colleges look for nowadays.</p>
<p>Thank you so much haha</p>
<p>Alright went at it in a whole new way lol</p>
<p>Consider something in your life you think goes unnoticed and write about why it’s important to you.</p>
<pre><code>Heading into my junior year at Boylan High School, school administration decided to implement a new policy known as “BYOT”. This stands for Bring Your Own Technology. With the world becoming more digital on a daily basis, the school thought it would be in everyone’s best interest to let students bring in their phones, laptops, or tablets for a variety of uses, such as note taking. Students are also allowed to use their technology for texting or Internet use while in lunch or study hall. Coincidentally, the amount of face-to-face conversation had with my peers at lunch fell dramatically that year. I had not lost friends, nor was I sitting with kids I did not know well. It was the just the plain fact that this generation loves social media. Nothing is more awkward than seeing someone sitting across from you “tweet” a thought or idea, rather than brining it up in discussion amongst the group. Social media is a great way for people to express themselves, but it has gotten to the point where social media has replaced social interaction. What has been lost in this day and age is the value of ‘real life” interaction with fellow human beings. Texting and social media are unable to convey the emotion or actions of a person that establish deeper human connections. These forms of virtual interaction allow an individual to in a sense showcase the best of themselves, only leading to disappointment in those whom they interact with face-to-face. It is only through daily “real life” conversation and interaction that you are able to perceive the wholeness of an individual, and come to from a genuine bond with them.
My favorite type of conversation has always been the kind that can only be carried out face-to-face, in a group, with no outside distractions. I have always been a very intimate person. I would much rather discuss with someone their thoughts, ideas, or emotions on a specific topic rather than the newest video game or the latest sports news. However, not all people are willing to open up themselves to such personal conversation without first establishing a relationship on the superficial level. I would not consider myself antisocial, as I am able to converse with my peers and teachers quite easily. Yet there are only a few individuals in my life with whom I have established a connection that is beyond the superficial level. To me, this deeper connection is the key to true friendship. This connection was not achieved through social media, or discussion of trivial matters, but through raw and emotional discussion that was at times difficult. The action of completely opening up oneself to another signifies human trust at its core. The realization that everyone is going through their own trial and tribulations, and the willingness to discuss such matters is what has allowed me to gain the small close-knit group of friends which I retain today.
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<p>why are you broadcasting this to the internet? Read the advice pinned to the top of the fourm.</p>
<p>Try not to pontificate about other people and those darned teenagers in your essays. The 2nd one has potential but tl;dr do NOT submit anything this long. It is better because it seems to more avoid broad sweeping generalizations and talks about something specific that happened at your school. That that out wherever you can. Also go back to the prompt and stay on task. What is it again that you do that goes unnoticed?</p>