Wanna tear my essay apart?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>I need someone to be harsh an honest and tell me what what I should change/ work on. Plus the normal grammatical and spelling errors. Kinda personal essay, but I find it easier to let strangers read it than people who know me. It’s topic #6 about diversity</p>

<p>Pretty please? :)</p>

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<p>I will if you read mine. I have two actually and I need help choosing. Just PM me.</p>

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<p>Just PM me.</p>