Wanted: Constructive Criticism

<p>I Wrote an essay on my internship working at our Nation’s Capitol and how i’ve come to appreciate my home. I need a stronger conclusion and constructive criticism on the overall essay. Anyone interested?</p>

<p>BTW–is it too cliche? ahh i guess that depends on how I answered it…constructive criticism is need…help please?</p>

<p>thnx</p>

<p>hmmm, sounds interesting i sent u a PM</p>