<p>my ec short answer is over 200 words, and i cant find a way to cut it. is anybody willing to help? thx a lot</p>
<p>i’ll copy and paste it here. can sb offer some advice and help me to cut some length .thx</p>
<p>My hometown Suzhou set around TaiHu area. For many years, TaiHu provide fresh and pellucid water for local residents without a word of complaint. In the June of 2006, the lake was filled with countless algae and the water was severely polluted. The transformation of water direcly caused water shortage in local area.</p>
<p>I didnot paid attention on TaiHu’s contamination until my dad had to drag water packs from the town forty miles away. This incident deeply increased my awareness of preservation and I was determined to do something that can benefit TaiHu.</p>
<p>In the last summer, I formed a team with my friends to start field research on the TaiHu water. We visited XiShan, GuangFu, and XiangShan towns along the riverside of TaiHu. We conducted a survey in 1000 people on industrial pollution and took water samples once every two months. In our research we found the industrial pollution in three towns is comparably less than agricultural contamination. On the base of our research, we wrote a paper on Water Contamination Regulation which received accolade from Suzhou Educational Office.</p>
<p>Through our investigation, I realized the origin of pollution is the exceeding exploitation of our natural resources. Only through given up the feeling of superior to the nature will people keep balance with our motherly Earth. This research experience strengthens my belief to become an environmentalist and to help TaiHu restore to is once clean natural state.</p>
<p>No offense, but is English your first language? You might want to tidy it up a bit…some of the usage is off.</p>
<p>But as for cutting it down, you should probably focus more on the third paragraph, because that seems to be the main part of the essay. The first two paragraphs should be combined and condensed.</p>
<p>You could omit the last paragraph. It’s interesting, but not as detailed as the rest.</p>
<p>well english is my second language and i am pretty poor on my grammar. Ill try to cut condense a little bit on first and second paragraph. But for grammar can sb be a little more specific, cuz im not really sure how to change it. thx guys.</p>
<p>bump bump …</p>