<p>essay question: what can you bring to the campus? (in 200 words or less)</p>
<p>MY ANSWER:</p>
<p>Looking at my transcript it is easy to think that this I am a middle class white girl with a not so great GPA. What my transcript cannot show is what experiences, wisdom and leadership I can bring to campus. My GPA may not be the best, but I show remarkable improvement and a rigorous junior and senior year schedule. Due to slacking and the wrong group of friends, I have been to the low academically, and am now able to help anyone else that is in an academic rut because I personally have experienced it, and gotten out of it successfully.
I have taken German and Russian at school, I work at an Afghani Restaurant, all where I learned of their cultures. I have traveled to a Native American Reservation, and on the urban side, Flint, Michigan doing mission work.
I planned volunteer events for my church youth group as Service Chair in my junior year, and going into senior I am going to be Youth Chair which requires leadership and dedication to run the Youth Council.
After reading this it is unreasonable to say I am just a middle class white girl with a not so great GPA.</p>
<p>instead of just saying you learned how to get out of the rut, give specific examples of WHAT it is you learned. like the above people said, you are kind of making excuses for yourself. instead, what’d you learn from that group of friends and how will you apply it to your life at nu?</p>
<p>I read “Essays that Worked.”
It says that the essay should not be repeating what you said in your extracurricular part of the application. They know that the essay is the one chance you have to connect with the admissions officer.
From my opinion:
What sets you apart from everyone else? Nearly everyone does activities.</p>
<p>I’ll add to what estan said: you introduced yourself and immediately noted a flaw. And, repeated that 3 more times. Plus the admission of slacking and bad friends. Maybe you are kidding us-?</p>