What makes a person wise?

College Essays
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<p>Please grade my essay 1 - 12:) </p>

<p>In my opinion, no one has pure wisdom. Each person has wisdom in a different way. One can have wisdom of common knowledge. Another can have wisdom of beauty. Everyone is wise, but in a different way. The wisest person defined thinks before they act. No one is wise if they don’t think before they act. Here is an example.</p>

<p>Three pigs went to seek there fortune. The first was the smartest, second was the normal one, and the third one had special needs. The first pig thought that the hay house would be cheap, safe, and easy to build, even when the two other pigs protested. So they left him and continued on. </p>

<p>The second pig found branches, and thought of them to be safe and cheap, although when the third pig protested. The second pig was not convinced by him. So the third pig left.</p>

<p>The third pig walked and walked till he found nice sturdy bricks and stones. Even when they were heavy and expensive he still constructed himself a house and so did the other pigs. The first two pig’s house blew down by a strong gush of wind and they eventually died.</p>

<pre><code>This shows that wisdom has to be all around you, in order to survive. This also shows that the third pig was concerned for his brothers. This shows that the first and second pig lack wisdom.
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<p>Wisdom is all around you just look and see. No one has all the wisdom, but everyone can equal to be the wisest.</p>

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<p>their and there are very different words. Be careful and watch your grammar!</p>

<p>I mean, I really wasn’t following this. I know the story of the three pigs fairly well and honestly, your conclusions are rather…simple to say the least. If not repetitive. Maybe you can rework this to be a bit more interesting and as sophisticated as you intended it to be. </p>

<p>Instead of focusing on the three pigs story, maybe focus on something personal where beautiful statements like, “Wisdom is all around you just look and see.” seem much more in the correct context. This has the potential to be fantastic. But for now, I’d put you on the much lower end of the spectrum.</p>

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<p>Well I am just in middle school!</p>

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<p>Excellent essay. Probably a ten. Some small errors and one medium error. The medium error was in your conclusory statement that the first two pigs lacked wisdom. This statement, as written, contradicts your theme that there are different types of wisdom possessed by different individuals. What you probably intended to write in your conclusion was that the first two pigs may have a different type of wisdom than the third pig and that the type of wisdom shown by the third pig was the type of knowledge, experience and learning needed to best address the problem.</p>

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<p>But why does e-rater keeps on giving me a 4 out of 6. Please give me some tips.</p>