What's wrong with my essay?

<p>I got an 8, and I think I wrote better than my last time, which gave me a 9. Here is a copy of the essay. Thank you!</p>

<p>Do people need discipline to achieve freedom? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations. </p>

<p><a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB7F56F3364102DEE043AC14A48E02DEp1&pageNum=1%5B/url%5D"&gt;https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB7F56F3364102DEE043AC14A48E02DEp1&pageNum=1&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p><a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB7F56F3364102DEE043AC14A48E02DEp1&pageNum=2%5B/url%5D"&gt;https://nsat.collegeboard.org/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?para1=AB7F56F3364102DEE043AC14A48E02DEp1&pageNum=2&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>I know it's complete B.S., but 25 minutes doesn't give you time to write anything. And when I compare my essay to some of the crap that's written in SAT books ("Once, my mom slipped on a puddle of something"), I wonder why my essay isn't making the grade. Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>The links don't seem to be working.</p>

<p>That's a pretty insurmountable problem.</p>

<p>When I click on the link, I am directed to my very own SAT essay. All the URLs to the essays appear to be the same, so copying and pasting the URL off collegeboard won't do any good. Upload your pics onto another server, such as photobucket or tinypic, and then we'd be glad to help.</p>