Which sentence? This one or this one?

College Essays
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<p>1st) As I studied my new surroundings, I recognized the strong antagonism the society had on individuality, embodied by an old Japanese proverb: “The nail that sticks out, gets hammered down.” </p>

<p>OR</p>

<p>2nd) As I studied my new surroundings, I recognized the strong antagonism the society had on individuality, signified by an old Japanese proverb: “The nail that sticks out, gets hammered down.”</p>

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<p>Pick whichever you like better. I doubt a single word of your essay will change anything. Honestly, you should be worrying about what your essay conveys more than how it conveys it, in my opinion.</p>

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<p>ohk thank you!
i think its just like, i’ve edited it and reread it soo many times i don’t know whats right from wrong now.
but thanks!!!
i’ve just submitted mine so yay!</p>

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<p>first…maybe…just a feeling</p>