Why Penn Essay?

<p>Okkk soo..I'm still working on this essay, tonight and tomorrow all day (no school) and hopefully I'll finish everything and be able to send everything in tomorrow night. I just have to revise page 217, and i have to do substantial portions of why penn essay and I just needed some help...</p>

<p>..I'm just talking about my interests and things i'ma ctively involved in and realting them to how penn fits perfectly for those and how i'd continue my intersts at penn and ita ll matches and blah blah. Since I wrote about my musical intersts in page 217 i wanna focus the why penn essay on debate and MGX Video (video productions company that i'm CFO of...also outreach club at school of which im treasurer)..u think that'd be good? it fits in cuz like we have our own tv program on local cable and penn has UTV13 a student-run tv station so im just matching al that stuf up and talking about it...sounds good?</p>

<p>And then like, just to make sure..what exactly does "the courses of study" mean?? I get the unique characteristics and why do you match part...but like courses of study? Yeah..I wanna do business at wharton..do I talk about my business itnerests? Or do I pick out specific classes I wanna take at penn? I'm just confused can someeone explain that whole part to me??</p>

<p>AnuVX, writting about your MGX Video company is a great idea. First, not many applicants have started their own business, so it makes you stand-out. Second, make sure it is focused, because if you jump around too much you are going to run out of space. (your best bet i think is focusing on your company) Third, if you can have your own show on UTV13 Penn will love you for the great contributions you will bring to their campus.</p>

<p>And what is this thing i hear about you not understanding "the courses of study"? Dude, you are a CEO at age 17/18, WTF more do you want to show other than your skills in business?!! Doesn't that just scream out: "I LOVE BUSINESS AND I WILL BE THE BEST BUSINESS MAN IN HISTORY."?? I am getting a little angry here. You kids are showing signs of paranoia, and lack confidence in every idea you come up with. </p>

<p>Now go write that prefect essay for Penn about your obsession with your own campany, before I have to get to where ever you live to biatchslap the sense into you.</p>

<p>haha..oookay im writing it...</p>

<p>but like I'm having a little trouble making it not sound like i'm just lifting off **** i did and accomplishments blah blah...i mean i wanna talk about my passion for business because of MGX Video and how i have a financial and managerial position blah blah..but i dun wanna just say "ooh i'm CFO of this company ooh i'm treasurer of the club ooh we have a tv program ooh utv13 is cool i could be part of it"</p>

<p>so like bLAH~</p>

<p>and then the whole organizational level...how should it be structured? i mean should i have one paragraph about mgx video and have one about deabte and one about music and one about general business interests/managing skills or should i just make mgxvideo/businessinterests the whole theme of the essay and just talk about that, while mentioning how debate has been a factor in leading me to business because i like speaking/argumentation etc. and also how learning 3 instruments for the last 8 years shows my perseverance and determination and crap...?</p>

<p>bummpppmpmpmpmp~!~!~!</p>

<p>do it the way you want, man.</p>

<p>Here's a tip: Insert Princeton for everytime you say Penn. If it still make sense, get rid of it.</p>

<p>AnuVX, you are getting me very angry again. So I will not be giving you anymore new ideas if you don't put me as one of your references on your essay. However, I will elaborate on my old ideas.</p>

<p>1 - Focus, Focus, Focus..... and Focus. If you are going to write about your business, then only write about your business. In fact, you should be so focused that the centre of focus in your essay is only a single event. Write about an epiphany you had on business or mgxvideos (if you write about the mgxvideo make sure you link it up real nice with business management), the moment you solved a problem, or your first debate. The key here is using one event to show one of your major personal traits/interest/philosophy. (In your case: I want business, and business whats me too) MGX video, debate, music choose ONE!</p>

<p>2 - There is NOT ENOUGH SPACE!!!!! If you can fit all your accomplishments, personal traits, interests, personal philosophy, 9/11, war on terror, tax cuts and who you support for the 2004 election all onto one page, than tell me where you live so i can crawl to your feet and burn you a lamb as offering. I think that says about everything I need to say about how there is NOT ENOUGH SPACE!!!!!!</p>

<h2>3 - Write an essay. The key to the structure of this kind of essay is to have a THESIS. THESIS = FOCUSED because THERE IS NOT ENOUGH SPACE!!!!!!!!! So write yourself a strong (strong means FOCUSED) thesis, and support it in the rest of the essay (with personal experience, logical reasoning, emotional conviction, whatever). Remember, be FOCUSED!!!!!!</h2>

<h2>"i mean should i have one paragraph about mgx video and have one about deabte and one about music and one about general business interests/managing skills or should i just make mgxvideo/businessinterests the whole theme of the essay and just talk about that, while mentioning how debate has been a factor in leading me to business because i like speaking/argumentation etc. and also how learning 3 instruments for the last 8 years shows my perseverance and determination and crap...?"</h2>

<p>AARRRRRRRRRRRR!!! I am so angry! If you are going to write one paragraph about every piece of junk in your mind, then you should apply to every junk-college in America. Instead, pick one junk out of all the junks and make it a treasure by FOCUSING on it. And WTF dude, I just wanted to cite one sentence from your post, but i had to highlight a whole f'ing paragraph. Please don't write like this in your essay.</p>

<p>AnuVX, leave me your address right now so I can drive south and biatchslap you, two times.</p>

<p>tip - if you really want to talk about every accomplishments, personal traits, interests, and personal philosophy, you have there is a little trick. It's called using a reference. For items 1 to 4 on your 1B form, add references.</p>

<p>Alright thanks! I'll give you my adress if I get in =D</p>