Will these attributes make my application effective?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<li>first to go to college in my family
-speak almost 3 languages (polish and English fluently, and taking AP Spanish)
-have 3 jobs ( construction worker, hockey referee and coach,
-over 36 hours of community service</li>
<li>parents are immigrants, never went to college
-3.1-3.2 gpa, one of the best public high schools in my state</li>
<li>really bad sat score, 1390. but im taking it again in june and again in october.
-also prob joining a club next year as a senior.
-also a great essay about how my experience in europe has effected me and given me an advantage over other students.
-first language- polish.</li>
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<p>my college of interest: University of Vermont.</p>

<p>really interested in animals, environment, sports, so i would like to major in something like zoology/environmental science, sports management, or go for being a cop/ secret service</p>

<p>thanks for the help</p>

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<p>also, 1 year jv hockey , 2 years varsity hockey (3rd next year), season of track, U-18 soccer, and trying out for soccer as a senior.</p>

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<p>You have a lot of experiences and qualifications that will be of interest to colleges. A few suggestions: in your essay it’s fine to write about your experiences in Europe, but don’t go so far as to state how that will put you at an advantage over other students. That is for the reader to decide. Your stating it would sound arrogant.
Also, try to raise your GPA a bit. Even a point or two can help. And definitely retake the SAT. Try to spend some time prepping for it if you didn’t the first time. Good luck!</p>