First off sorry CC I have been posting a lot this past week with deadlines coming up!
I am wondering if the following essay format would work, and if anyone has any suggestions. Some Background: I have been playing piano for 14 years and my integration of music and business is the focus of my apps.
First paragraph: Opens with me playing with a very good orchestra, goes on to denote the success I had at 15.
Second paragraph: At the peek of my career, my piano teacher dies of liver failure. I slowly realize that everything he stood for is using music a service and channel for communication. I have been profit and prestige driven
Third paragraph: Here is how I have used music to serve others. (Joining non-profits and performing concerts, giving free lessons, etc. etc.)
Fourth paragraph: Here is how I have grown as a leader, and how I have utilized the lessons I gained in business and in life
Some concerns: It sounds like I am bragging at the beginning, but I do this to establish credibility, and the gravity of the death of my teacher. Also Idk if going with the shock factor of death is a good idea, as I feel like that is heavily used.
Any insight is appreciated. Thank you!!