Will you read over a short piece and give advice?

College Essays
1

<p>Hi, I have a short piece that I wrote for possible competition or college piece. The question simply asked: Have you done something big or small this year to make your school, community, or the world a better place? Tell us why you deserve to be the winner.</p>

<p>The piece is not very long and I was willing if I could have people read it and give suggestions, and critiques (the harsher, the better), please. </p>

<p>If you would be willing too, just respond, and I can private message you the piece. </p>

<p>Thanks everyone.</p>

2

<p>hello i’d be willing :)</p>

3

<p>I’ll take a look if you’re comfortable.</p>

4

<p>i wish i didn’t have to bump this. sorry.</p>

5

<p>I can look at it if you’d like solely for an overall critique (I dont have much time to do grammar sentence by sentence sorry :frowning: )</p>

6

<p>yea that is absolutely fine, i’ll send you a pm.
thanks again.</p>

7

<p>Sure, PM away.</p>

8

<p>wouldn’t mind…</p>