Would anybody be willing to look at my Personal Statement and Yale supplement essay?

College Essays
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<p>My academic credentials and test scores are basically perfect (4.0, 12 AP classes with all 5s so far, 2380 on SAT), and my extracurriculars (youth symphony, key club, NHS, math team, knowledge bowl, was volunteer for local state senate campaign) are well above average as well, so I think if my essays are good I have a decent chance at getting into Yale.</p>

<p>My personal statement is about my struggle to master the Bartok Viola concerto (one of the hardest pieces in the literature) and I’m hoping to highlight my resolve and willingness to challenge myself. </p>

<p>My Yale supplement essay is about how I helped teach an Alternative PE (ie special ed) in 9th grade and how it shaped my perceptions about the mentally challenged. </p>

<p>They aren’t anywhere near perfect yet, but would anyone be willing to take a look at them? Any suggestions/criticisms would be welcome. I’ll PM the essays to whoever would like to see them.</p>

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<p>sure man…i can help if u want me to</p>

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<p>send it my way</p>

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<p>i’m here as well</p>

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<p>Sure, send it over!!</p>

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<p>send it over</p>

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<p>pmmmmmmmmm</p>

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<p>Puedo leerlos :)</p>

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<p>I’m obviously in your class, so if you don’t feel comfortable sharing it, I completely understand. But, I’m a decent writer and I’ll be happy to read it.</p>

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<p>i will read if you like. I am a current senior in hs but am not applying to Yale and have a pretty upstanding personal integrity so you dont need to worry.</p>

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<p>I’m not worried about anyone copying… The essays are pretty rough at this point, so you’d only be hurting yourself anyways :p</p>

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<p>Lol, with your stats, I don’t even know why you’d need an essay xD But then again, there are 100s of other kids with those stats T_T</p>

<p>Send it my way, I’ll critique it good :P</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look if you’d like.</p>

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<p>I will read it and give you some inputs. PM me.</p>