Would anyone be kind enough to grade my essay?

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<p>Hey guys! It’s my first post here. I recently wrote a SAT essay and would like your guys’ opinion on it.</p>

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<p>This took up the all alloted space and I was writing till the wire.</p>

<p>Thanks in advance!</p>

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<p>I think you over-summarized on your examples just a bit.</p>

<p>You said that this filled up the allotted space, which is good, but it does seem like it could be a bit longer.</p>

<p>Good luck :]</p>

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<p>First off, it would be better to have the paragraph on the individual being more creative, and then following up with the example of group creativity.</p>

<p>Something I noticed: Alex Rider is fictional. The Ghost Army was real.</p>

<p>Keep the comparisons in the same universe. The teacher(s) grading your essay may lower your score if he/she/they noticed what I did. If you used a real person as an example in similar style, your score would be 8-10.</p>

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<p>Yeah, I realized this as well. Thanks for the advice!</p>

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First off, it would be better to have the paragraph on the individual being more creative, and then following up with the example of group creativity.
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<p>Why?</p>

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Keep the comparisons in the same universe. The teacher(s) grading your essay may lower your score if he/she/they noticed what I did./quote]</p>

<p>Why?</p>

<p>@PeterCheng.</p>

<p>You seem to espouse a lot of information that does not really make sense. I have heard that examples can come from all facets of history, literature, and life, so I really do not understand why my work would be marked down because I used a fiction example to support my argument.</p>

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<p>Bumpbumpbump.</p>

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<p>Bumpbumpbump.</p>