Would anyone like to shorten my essay?

<p>It's an essay about my mother who impacted my life.. I'm not a good writer. The essay came out to be extremely long -- 827 words. I definitely need to shorten it. </p>

<p>Would anybody like to help out?
Also, if possible, would anyone like to brutally critique my essay? It would be greatly appreciated! </p>

<p>Here's the topic:
Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life
and explain how and why this person is important to you.</p>


<p>PM me :] </p>

<p>i'm a senior in high school though.... just a warning.</p>

<p>Hi ViTong4,</p>

<p>I have sent you my essay. Is there anyone else who would like to read it and help me out?</p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

<p>Pm me it :)</p>

<p>I would be happy to read it</p>

<p>cookieperson, sorry i was busy during the weekday. I started cutting it down yesterday. :] i'll have it to you by tonight or tomorrow! sorry for the delay!</p>

<p>Thanks for all your time everyone, I have sent each of you all a PM.</p>