<p>Hello everyone,</p>
<p>Is it possible for you guys to critique my essay? I mean I DON’T know whether my essay is mind-blowing or not, but I hope someone is kind enough to provide suggestions, etc.</p>
<p>Please post if interested.</p>
<p>Thanks for your time.</p>
<p>Sure…I wouldnt mind. It should be interesting! My email is <a href=“mailto:pperfectusa@yahoo.co.in”>pperfectusa@yahoo.co.in</a></p>
<p>give it also to me</p>
<p><a href=“mailto:swetko@elits.rousse.bg”>swetko@elits.rousse.bg</a></p>
<p>I am not a critic, but i shall try to tell you the impression</p>
<p>Ok, you can send to <a href="mailto:horyear89■■■■■■.com">horyear89■■■■■■.com</a></p>
<p>why not to <a href="mailto:danielsjang@gmail.com">danielsjang@gmail.com</a>
i’ll try to be of help</p>
<p>sounds interesting: <a href="mailto:gospurs50@satx.rr.com">gospurs50@satx.rr.com</a>
curious to know what type of things other ppl are writing about</p>
<p>Hello,
I like the idea of the function. You put small input and get large output. I think you have explained that well.</p>
<p>1st paragraph - You have mentioned the exponential function but have demonstrated properties only of an ordinary increasing function. “better today than you were yesterday, and not as good as you hope to be tomorrow” means just that the function is increasing. The idea of this is good and frankly speaking i do not think this is a problem, but i do not know what might others think of it.</p>
<p>2-paragraph. I think the right place of the first sentence is at the end of the paragraph since there is no transition between it and the second and third sentence.</p>
<p>Also you should give more details how exactly your family and community have helped you build your dreams and aspiration. For example if you remember you may give details how has the interest in computers/electronics aroused. Since that is the main question. How were your dreams and aspirations formed by your world.
You just mention that your family and frineds, community have shaped you into the person you are, but try to explain HOW, by giving some concrete details. And maybe you should allocate some more space for your family cuz i think the have had great influence on you.</p>
<p>Swetko - Thanks for your input. I will edit it again, and will try to focus on my family more.</p>
<p>You see, the reason why I haven’t focused on my family is because I talked about them HELL lot in my optional essays… but I guess the right place for that is the main essay.</p>
<p>Thanks again.</p>
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