<p>I was just trying to practice thinking of examples for prompts in under five minutes so i gave myself 5 minutes to come up with examples and a thesis.</p>
<p>The prompt was Is the world changing for the better?</p>
<p>In intro para, i would have defined better as improving the quality of life.</p>
<p>Here is the Thesis: The world is changing for the better because the quality of life for individuals and society as a whole has advanced over time.</p>
<p>Here are my examples:
Immunizations-No more massive pandemics that kill millions, even for swine flu, we already have a vaccine</p>
<p>Social Rights- As time has progressed more and more groups have gained equality (women, and blacks) even today Gay people are campaigning for change, it is happening, States like Vermont, Maine, and others</p>
<p>Diplomacy/War- Since WWII, there have been no major armed conflicts that have killed tens of thousands, people have not had to live in utter fear, as a whole. Diplomacy has worked efficiently.</p>
<p>Would a paper with these examples and thesis be good enough for a 10 or higher.</p>
<p>The first two aren’t bad, if a bit cliche. Between them, I would say that the social issues are much more prominent. You could even tie the fact about gay marriage – and the resistance it generates – into the idea that, while the world is improving socially, not everybody is on the same level.</p>
<p>I would completely avoid the last topic, as it’s only generally true. No, there haven’t been any armed conflicts, but the world is far from peace and diplomacy has far from worked. Isrealis are under constant threat from organizations like Hamas funded by terrorist states; rogue nations like Iran engage in racially-charged nuclear proliferation and promise a second holocaust. North Korea (a nation we are technically still at war with) is violating international treaties and firing off IBMs at Hawaii. The Dahli Lama has been stripped of his power and the Chinese regime has still not relinquished it back to him, refusing to acknowledge Tibet as a sovereign nation. Civil war still ravages much of Africa, and many of the Muslim factions in the Middle-East are still trying to kill each other while the United States continues it’s unashamed occupation of Iraq and Afghanistan. Minor armed conflict kills thousands every year, people in under-developed regions continuously live in terror, and diplomacy has fallen flat on it’s face. The world is not at peace, even if it may seem so to an individual such as yourself – living in a free, democratic nation – who has the luxury of higher education; you would be amazed what’s creeping on your doorstep. Writing such a topic would appear very daft and unlearned.</p>
<p>Alright here is another one from a different topic</p>
<p>Prompt: Do we need other people to further understand ourselves?</p>
<p>Thesis: One needs people in order to achieve self-understanding. Several examples from literature support this stance.</p>
<p>Ex1: Atlas Shrugged-Dagny Taggart needs to see all the other great men of the world disappar in order for her to better understand her own motivations and roots of ambition. She needs John Galt’s guidance to be able to better understand herself and why she should stop helping the moochers(i wouldn’t use that word)</p>
<p>Ex2: Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance: Phaedrus(i forget his other name) needs his son and his friends on his road trip in order to bounce his ideas off of and in essence have someone that will listen. The other people allow Phaedrus to see the effects he has on people and then allows for him to better understand himself seeing those effects he has.</p>
<p>Ex3: Made up personal anecdote about how people around me told me that i seemed too nonchalant and then that there comments made me realize that i had to make a change about myself, it helped me to better understand the roots of why i acted a certain way.</p>
<p>It’s best to avoid personal examples so I’d try to find something else to replace example 3.</p>
<p>oh ok, i will remember that, for some reason i never feel like my examples are that great, i don’t know exactly what it is about them, it is that whole only having 25 minutes that throws me off, but i hope and need to pull of a 10 on the essay and i will be happy.</p>
<p>The essay is not a testimony of how great of a writer you are. I think it’s more so how well you can follow a certain format of writing that ETS is looking for. You don’t really need stellar examples, it’s more so how you manage to use those examples to support your assertion. So don’t worry too much about coming up with examples.</p>