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<p><strong>At the age of seventeen, Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) being a practicing physician, was when he proved</strong> his remarkable competence by curing the seriously ill King of Bukhara.</p>

<p>(A) At the age of seventeen, Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) being a practicing physician, was when he proved
(B) At the age of seventeen, Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) was a practicing physician, he proved
(C) A practicing physician at the age of seventeen, Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) proved
(D) Practicing as a physician at the age of seventeen, Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) has proven
(E) A practicing physician at the age of seventeen named Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037), proved</p>

<p>Okay, the answer is C. Though I got this right, I had a problem with E.
What exactly is wrong with E other than excessive wordiness? Isn’t it grammatically correct otherwise?</p>

<p>(For e.g., “A pretty hairdresser at the age of thirty named Julie opened a new shop” doesn’t sound wierd. I guess I am still skeptical about “at the age of thirty” since it clusters the adjective phrases, but… I mean what’s the problem?)</p>

<p>thanx in advance :-)</p>

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<p>pick the best answer. e as you stated is wordy, therefore it is wrong</p>

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<p>I think it comes down to which one is the better answer, in which case, C sounds better. E just sounds wrong when I say it out loud, and so does your example about the pretty hairdresser.</p>

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<p>has is present and the dude in question was alive like 1000 years ago.</p>

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<p>When you’re rephrasing a portion of a sentence, you’re not only doing it to make it grammatically correct; but also trying to make it clearer without wordiness.</p>

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<p>okay guys thank u for confirming my explanation :)</p>

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<p>^I think E is wrong due to verb subject error not wordiness.</p>

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<p>@realityisadream, nope, it’s fine. “A practicing physician proved”</p>

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<p>^ The comma is suspicious. It should be: A practicing physician at the age of seventeen named Avicenna (c. A.D. 980-1037) proved…</p>

<p>Plus, the comma indicates an independent clause(seperated from a dependant clause),but the comma here ,however, doesnt indicate anything, so the comma here is wrong.</p>

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<p>@realityisadream</p>

<p>yeah i agree. For e.g., “A smart student named Sally came to my school” is correct, while “A smart student named Sally, came to my school” is not. I guess people can get confused by this because we verbally pause at that point in the middle of the sentence.</p>

<p>i kinda felt that it wasn’t mere wordiness. thanx</p>

<p>@SirWanksalot,</p>

<p>thank you for bringing that question up :)</p>