I often think it is useful to step back and go straight to the source. So here, for example, is what Wharton says:
We seek students who will avail themselves of the rich academic, cultural, and social opportunities of the Penn community. Students who flourish at Wharton and Penn possess a history of academic excellence, a healthy degree of motivation, and a well-developed interest and involvement in their community and environment.
While there is no magic formula, we are looking for students who have:
Overall this kid seems to be on the right path, but I would suggest there is a sort of high level issue about whether an applicant is truly someone who makes the most of “social opportunities”, who has a genuine “interest and involvement in their community”, who sees business as something which can “fuel positive change to advance the world’s economic and social well-being,” and is a welcome “leader” of others.
Indeed, Wharton is basically communicating they want all those things to be “well-developed”, “demonstrated”, and so on. And I think sometimes, kids who aren’t really passionate about these things, who if truth were told were more interested in things like individual accomplishment, personal financial success, relative social status, and such, sort of try to fake it by doing one or more activities they hope will “check” this box.
And that might work, but I also suspect a lot of times when kids like that don’t get the admissions results they were hoping to get, it is in part because the admissions officers didn’t quite buy it. Indeed, I suspect sometimes what happens is there isn’t a clear vision of that kid they are hoping to seem to be reinforced in things like recommendations.
So how do you maximize your chances of them buying it? Well, I think the uncomfortable truth is you basically having to try to really be that person. Like, spend years developing the sorts of character traits and values they are looking for. Take seriously your social and ethical development. Learn to enjoy helping others around you even when no one seems to be looking. Become the sort of person who is not just “impressive” but actually really liked and valued as a member of their school and local community.
And that won’t guarantee success either. But I think it is worth doing for its own sake. And I also think it happens to give you the best chance of actually coming across like such a person when applying to these programs.