does this sound ok? (interview help)

Pre-College Topics High School Life
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<p>For my english research project, we have to interview someone in the field we have chosen. I’m doing sociologists and found a bunch of their e-mail addresses on a website. How does this e-mail I’m planning to send to them sound?</p>

<p>Dear [insert name here],</p>

<p>I am a high school student from New England who is considering a career in sociology. For my career research paper, I have chosen to write about sociologists. I found your e-mail address on the [insert website here] website and was wondering if you would like to answer a few questions about working in the field of sociology. The questions are below. Please do not feel as if you are under any obligation to answer them.</p>

<p>Thanks in advance,
[My name here]</p>

<p>Is this too formal? Not formal enough?</p>

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<p>i’d edit it in the following way:</p>

<p>Dear [insert name here],</p>

<p>I am a high school student from New England who is considering a career in sociology. Thus, for my career research paper, I have chosen to write about sociologists. I found your e-mail address on the [insert website here] website and was wondering if you could answer a few questions about working in the field of sociology. The questions are below. It would be great if you contributed; thank you for your time.</p>

<p>Sincerely,
[My name here]</p>

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<p>Thanks, I’ll use that</p>

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<p>And be sure and send a handwritten thank you note via snailmail to those that helped you</p>

<p>it is better than an email thank you and someday, one of those people may be able to help you,</p>

<p>a thankcard is rare these days and does stand out</p>

<p>see if you can find someone who is in your city to send requests to, you never know</p>

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<p>haha don’t worry, they certainly won’t feel obligated to answer</p>