how acne changed me

College Essays and Writing Help
#1

<p>writing about how i took accutane - severe drug for acne, showing how acne changed me socially, athletically, academically. it defines who i am, i fought thru the acne and worked my way out of it...show how i actually worked for everything i have accomplished today. most things that I want I can get by working hard, and without having to fight thru acne, which gave me a huge amount of mental strength, i would not have this quality today.</p>

<p>is this good?
i dont want to focus on acne...i want to focus on my work ethic and desire to achieve something i want
all of my teachers write about how i am the hardest working student, and i have worked my way up from a lowly freshman to a well respected senior</p>

#2

<p>Honestly at first I was like "wait, what!?". (I'm sure you understand your topic has somewhat of a 'shock factor' because it's slightly unusual.) But after reading the explanation, it sounds like a very workable topic with a lot of potential. I think the unusual topic choice could work in your favor and grab attention, and you could make a pretty creative title with that topic choice.</p>

<p>Oh but make sure you don't just repeat what your teachers said about working your way up, since it won't help you to retell what has already been stated. Good luck and I'd love to read it if you want critiquing.</p>

#3

<p>I just wanted to say I laughed at this, but not in the way you would think. I was looking up acne treatments just a moment ago as nothing seems to work for me and I came across "Accutane" recently. So on a side note is Accutane worth it?</p>

<p>In regards to your essay, I am not sure how you plan on going about this topic. In my mind this can be a "hit or miss" essay in my mind. It seems like this may be a slightly "cliche" topic to write about. (Sadly now a days EVERYTHING is cliche)</p>

<p>Thats my opinion on this essay topic. If you know how you plan to go about this and have a clear picture of what you want to get on paper just do it then critizie it later. It has potential if you can go about this in a unique way! Good Luck my friend and hope your acne is doing well!!</p>

#4

<p>0705283 will you actually read it? if so, ill send you a message.</p>

#5

<p>Sure I'll actually read it, as long as it's not over, say, 1300 words. I look forward to receiving your message.</p>

#6

<p>anyone else? its only 574 words</p>

#7

<p>I'll be willing to read it! I suffer from pretty severe acne too, so I'll prob. be able to relate to your experiences :D</p>

#8

<p>Wow! Your title really grabbed me!! It sounded very interesting and original. Whenever I started reading your message it seemed...well....boring

[quote]
which gave me a huge amount of mental strength, i would not have this quality today

[/quote]

Yawn!</p>

<p>BUT if you keep it snappy and original I think it could be great! Just don't make it the cliche essay where you could sub in the topic cancer, death, disability etc. and it still work. Make sure you keep that shock (acne???) in there! I'd be happy to read though...that was just my initial thoughts based on your title and message :)</p>

#9

<p>I think it's a great topic. Don't screw it up by being overly sentimental.</p>

#10

<p>revised it to 600 words..yellow daisy told me to change it to more of a story so i was showing and not telling..havent changed it to that format yet. someone willing to read my revised one and give advice on which route i should take?
thanks</p>

#11

<p>Definitely tell your story, and make your philosophical points at the end. Will read if you like.</p>

#12

<p>Send it on over!</p>

#13

<p>thanks greennblue - definitely recommend him</p>

#14

<p>anyone else?</p>

#15

<p>and i made more changes its 623 words. has less confusing content after revisions and ur advice</p>

#16

<p>I'll read it, if you're willing to help me shave some stuff off my Yale short takes lolz :)</p>

#17

<p>alright i will pm it to you</p>

#18

<p>I'd be happy to read it. :) My topic is actually a bit similar to yours, haha.</p>

#19

<p>haha how so?</p>

#20

<p>As a fellow sufferer of acne, I'd love to read your essay for you!</p>