For my coalition essay I’m planning to write a story about maturing through the tragedies over the course of my life. The story will start off with my mother being diagnosed with stage 4 breast cancer, while I was in elementary school. At such a young age, I was unable take the new responsibilties, so my father had violently forced them upon me. Then, in middle school my mother passed away leading me to realize that I had to take on the new responsibilities. In high school, my family went homeless due to financial issues. The lost of a home and business breaks my dad leading to a declining morals for the family. The story basically cycles itself as I realized that I had to take the role as the face of the household, which reversed the role between me and my father. Now that I was in my father’s role. I attempted to convince my sister to grow up. She believed that the situation was unjust for her as I had in elementary school. Instead of using violence, I used a monologue to explain that we had to be better than our peers. She finally understood and our family ended up pulling our selves out of homeless situation. I conclude by explaining how I originally wanted to become an oncologist to help families will go through the same ordeal I’ve gone through. However after going homeless, I work up the courage to quit swimming in order to pursue my true passion in engineering. As I believe that I can create medical devices that will assist doctors around the world allowing me to impact the lives of millions of people.
I believe that the tradegies within my didn’t negatively impact me now as I didn’t adopt a defeatist mentality. It’s quite the opposite, an individual as I was still able to maintain A’s in all my 15 AP classes. I’ve also taken higher level mathmatics courses at a local community college that wasn’t offered by my school. COVID-19 pandemic caused many offline school events to close down. However, I’ve adapted, and worked on some impressive online projects like building a rocket simulation from scratch[No framework or libraries] as an academic project. I also worked at a local start-up as an engineer/technician.
I don’t want the essay come off a sob story. Instead I want it to be an inspirational story that fits well with my other essays. The story should start the admission officers with a good impression of me. Feel free to critique my essay plan, so that it can be at it’s best form.