Is my personal statement good?

<p>I really want to get into NHSI at northwestern for film. prompt: Write a one-page statement telling why you want to attend the National High School Institute.</p>

<p>my response: </p>

<pre><code>I found myself overwhelmed with exhilaration as I realized what I had gotten myself into. For five days I would be introduced to this new world of cinema, one where I had no prior experience in. Feeling excited yet anxious, I looked around UCLA’s studio, which was filled with glorious cameras, high-tech computers, and equipment I never even knew existed. Unbeknown to me, I would be making a silent film with three random people in just four days. It felt like it was all too much, when I remembered Stanley Kubrick’s wise words, “Perhaps it sounds ridiculous, but the best thing that young filmmakers should do is to get a hold of a camera and some film and make a movie of any kind at all.” Suddenly, my situation didn’t seem so ridiculous. Within those four days, creative ideas permeated through everyone’s minds, and my group successfully finished a film that seemed impossible when we were first writing it. I felt proud knowing that I had put in any contribution I could have, from yelling at people to get out of the way so they wouldn’t be in the background of a shot, to spraying water on the actors during breaks so they wouldn’t faint from the heat. I was also finally able to take on my dream role as the cinematographer, as I had been craving to get my hands on a camera since experiencing Jack Cardiff and Frederick Elmes’s cinematography. With this first film, my eyes were opened to the endless possibilities of filmmaking, and I was beginning to see what filmmaking meant to me- ingenious ideas, execution of those ideas, and more commonly, failure. To this day, I have not been part of a project more beautiful or stressful than making a film. Looking through a camera lens, one gets to see the world with a new perspective; suddenly, everything looks beautiful, everything looks like it should be filmed for the world to see. Editing is not definite; there are so many ways to tell a story that one can dare to experiment. Thus, the stress kicks in. Even when one is limited, it is impossible to say that there is an exclusive way of making a film; more ideas can actually abound when one is limited. However, I believe that I can discover what methods work for me and that I can further my development as a cinematographer and screenwriter this summer at the National High School Institute. I am positive that in five weeks I will learn what I need to know to carry me on and to keep inspiring me to make films on my own with confidence. The stress and exhilaration that I felt the first day at my first film camp is how I have felt about films and filmmaking to this very day, and something that I never want to lose, for I cannot find the same feeling in anything else. As stressful and overwhelming filmmaking is, there’s always something to help- the people I make the film with. No one else can understand the feelings that may come about when making a film because they were simply not there, and there is a bond, but it is shrouded in competition because everyone pushes each other. I believe that with the National High School Institute’s status, people of caliber will be by my side as I will be on their side, to help each other discover where our true strengths lie.
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<p>My first experience with filmmaking taught me that filmmaking is about going beyond one’s own and the world’s expectations of what equipment and a couple of humans can do. I am still learning where I can go as an artist, and I know that continuing my education with filmmaking is dire so I can develop and mature.</p>

<p>Keep, I don’t really comment on posters’ personal statements–I just don’t have the time to do it–so I don’t have a comment on your essay per se.</p>

<p>But I do suggest you read this post, pinned at the top of this forum: <a href=“http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-admissions/1466-posting-essays-other-sensitive-information.html[/url]”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-admissions/1466-posting-essays-other-sensitive-information.html&lt;/a&gt;. It explains why posting your essay on the boards is probably not a great idea.</p>

<p>Now, this was just your NHSI essay, and not your college applications, so there’s probably no real harm done. But if you decide to stick around here while you’re searching for and applying to colleges, you probably want to follow that advice.</p>

<p>Oh, and good luck with NHSI. I was a Theatre cherub in the early '80s. One of the best summers of my life!</p>

<p>I would ask your English teacher to review with you. There are many grammar errors and words are misused.</p>