Is this a good idea for a personal statement?

<p>My idea would be about basketball.</p>

<p>When I was in elementary and junior high I was a little chubby and was made fun of a lot. So in high school I tried out for the basketball team and made it surprisingly. The coach said he saw a lot of potential in me cause my height and my rebounding. So the first day of practice we had to do layups… but i didnt know what it was. I didnt know how to dribble or shoot or anything I had absolutely no idea like i didnt even know what a dropstep move was. And so teh first day I was so embarrassed. I sat on the bench everygame and whenver i was put in I would make a silly mistake and be pulled out. I could talk about how I felt ashamed on the bench because all the eyes of the people in the crowd seemed to be mocking me. So to get better I came to the gym at 6 o clock every morning to practice for one hour. I would play until the bell rang for first period and even though I was all sweaty i didnt care cause i needed to practice so i endured all the humiliation of sweating in first period cause I REALLY wanted to get better. My sophomore year… I made it to JV and ended up being the MVP and averaged 20 points and 24 rebounds a game. At that point I was picked to go to Varsity for the summer, it was at this point that i became cocky and thought I had overcome everything. In the summer I stopped practicing and my skill just leveled and didnt get any better. After the summer my coach told me that I have lost the spirit and that he wanted it back so he put me down on JV. I was shocked and mad at him first like how could you put me down on JV after Ive worked so hard and im better than everybody? So on JV I still tried but I always kept taht in the back of my mind and one day I got so frustrated and began to lose hope in basketball. During the middle of my season I stopped practicing my hardest and during a game I yelled at the ref for the first time. My coach yelled at me after the game and asked me why i yelled at the ref. I began to cry in front of him it was the most humbling thing I have EVER experienced. I told him how I wanted to win and be the best but I felt like ive been betrayed. He told me straight up looking in my eyes and told me that no matter what, win or lose, varsity or jv, his biggest concern was how I ended up growing as a man and taht not only can i have fun playing basketball but i have to develop responsibility and good morals. From that point on I changed. My fire for basketball was rekindled and I began to practice every morning. In the weight room I packed on more weight and when I knew in my head i couldnt do any more pushups I still did htem. In sprints I would go all out and give it all I got to the point i would throw up in trash cans between sprints. And this year Im on varsity again as the co-captain. </p>

<p>Kinda long but could I write bout that?</p>

<p>Well, that’s good :slight_smile:
My suggestion: focus on your downfall, maybe? Like about your struggle and you suddenly being put down to JV :smiley:
just a humble suggestion from an unathletic person, though.</p>

<p>Oh yea DEFINATELY I totally agree. I think that if I really emphasize my downfall my struggle about how I felt so emotionally down and depressed then they can tell that I really cared about it and how I was going through tough times and like that I dunno… I mean next year when I actually write this I will write it really well cause it was genuinely IMPORTANT to me haha but yea dude iI totally agree!</p>

<p>Oh God, don’t ask anybody besides you yourself to write your essay!</p>

<p>The adcoms are fully-experienced people who can distinguish which is genuinely written down by you and which isn’t.</p>