Joke Essay

<p>So I was trying to write my main essay for MIT, about how my environment has shaped my dreams and whatnot, but I didnt know how to begin. So I decided to write this joke essay instead. Any stylistic critique is welcome. And if you really need to ask, no, I am not the son of a butcher.</p>

<p>ATTENTION MODS this is a JOKE essay, not a real one, so dont remove it.</p>

<pre><code>When I think about my environment, “meat” is the first thing that comes to mind. “What?!” This is a question I have had to answer many times in the past, and I will attempt to answer it again here. I am the son of a butcher, who was the son of a butcher, who in turn was the son of a butcher, probably as far back in history as has been recorded. For most animals, blood may run through meat, but for me, meat runs in my veins. How is it, then, that I want to design megarobots capable of destroying the entire United States army? Well, it all started with a television show called Transformers.

I remember, vividly, sitting in the meat shop with nothing else to do. Of course my dad let me hack off some arms and legs occasionally, to fulfill my inherent male bloodlust, but I wanted some intellectual stimulation. What better source for this than television? Oh yes, I remember the wailing 80’s-esque guitars in the background as Optimus Prime gave some fateful speech concerning the Deceptacons’ final assault. It was so heroic, so glorious, so epic. I knew then, I had to become a Transformer.

Living around meat manipulation has exposed me to the pliability of the body. No wonder, then, that news of organ transplants and bodily enhancement technology made sense to me. This growing movement, coupled with the exponential advances being made in robotic AI, promises to give humans the capability to become more than simply human. Of course, it may be several decades from now until we have mastered the mind/machine interface, but I believe the day will inevitably come.

My parents have supported me in this dream. We butchers know, more than anyone, the disgustingness of the carbon-based life form. My parents may not live long enough to witness the day when humans evolve into cyborgs, but they take consolation in the fact that their genes will be carried on, eventually uploaded into a computer and manifested in the program structure of my future silicon-based neural net.

Let us be serious, though. There are many steps that must be undertaken before we can embark on the next step of evolution. The fields of robotic AI and neuroscience must advance greatly. We must have landmarks. That is why I would like to design non-sentient robots and to conduct a series of questionably ethical neurological experiments. MIT is by far the greatest institution for these pursuits.

I have somewhat of an evolutionary imperative to undertake my dreams. Once we have the technology, there will inevitably be those who use it for their own personal advantage. Why not join them? Why not stay at the forefront of intellectual and physical power? Throughout the millennia, species have become extinct because they did not embrace this imperative. I do not want to pass into extinction. Let me in to MIT!
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<p>lol…</p>

<p>that is genius, i think some one should submit an essay like that… just to see what happens… i was thinking about doing something like that for one college to see what happens</p>

<p>You would probably be accepted.</p>

<p>God…this is a really good ESSAY… :D</p>

<p>I love it. This essay serves the dual purposes of highlighting your excellent writing skills and also that you have the ability to laugh at yourself, which is a very good thing. There is no pretentious diction and no self promotion. You make it crystal clear not only why you want to study at MIT, but also that you have the temperment to succeed. I wish you the best of luck.</p>

<p>oh gosh… why not just send it? it sounds very good to me.
oh my, i love MIT so much, love such crazy, creative minds… just imagine to have a bunch of such people around you (those people are actually like you), life would be wonderful…
I did have the same intension and nearly sent it, i wrote one of my essay in the form of proof by induction (lol) but then i decided not to risk my whole life so… yeah, somehow i feel like i am a coward… hic-
You guys are GREAT !!!</p>

<p>good essay, I do think you need to keep the serious and engaging tone you used in the beginning…it drifts off by the 4th paragraph. </p>

<p>Great essay, but you need to actually weave in a few more serious statements about MIT and yourself. The “questionably ethical experimentation” should not form your interest in MIT. That’s a tad insulting (I would not link that to MIT!), even though its clearly part of the joke. Rather, throw into the comical mix some real-life details about MIT that seriously match your interests, which are presumably in robotics. The key to winning with this essay is making it all look like a joke (which you’ve got) but also weaving in a serious thesis (MIT is a great place for me to explore my interest in robotics, specifically <em>DETAIL</em> <em>DETAIL</em> <em>DETAIL</em>)
I mean, you’re off to a great start.
Hopefully the rest of your app is seriously good. IF you’ve got the scores and at least 1 other serious essay, you’re good.
BTW, take out the last sentence…“let me in.” That is just TOO comical to be cute/funny. That’s all. Good luck.</p>

<p>The key to winning with this essay is making it all look like a joke (which you’ve got down) but also weaving in a serious thesis (MIT is a great place for me to explore my interest in robotics, specifically <em>DETAIL</em> <em>DETAIL</em> <em>DETAIL</em>)</p>

<p>Well, thank you heartily for the advice… but I never had any intention of sending this. Hopefully I’ll be able to write a REAL essay of the same quality.</p>