So I just want some help in getting ideas for my college essays and advice on my ideas and feedback. My idea is to use an old essay for a competition as a skeleton and talking about being homesick after going to the UK from Hong Kong alone when I was 13 for boarding school. But then elaborate on how I overcame this and talk about all the positive skills and new things I learnt in the UK such as debating or writing. My old essay included about how the UK law protected me for being gay whereas Hong Kong does not but I know stuff like this is really over-done so should I bother with this at all? And would my essay above work if written well.
feedback on above would be appreciated. thank you!
I was going to talk about how this made me sympathise with young refugees, immigrants and low-income students who had much worse external challenges to balance with their studies and was hence motivated to start a non-profit (no, I did not start this for my college app) to connect ordinary secondary school tutors looking for a job to the refugees/low-income pupils for tuition and support
Your idea of using your experience of overcoming homesickness and discovering new skills in the UK for your college essay is powerful and personal. It showcases resilience and growth, which are valued qualities in college admissions. While discussing topics like LGBTQ+ rights may seem common, your perspective as an individual navigating different legal protections adds depth to your narrative. Focus on crafting a compelling story that highlights your journey and the insights gained. Your essay has the potential to be impactful if written authentically and thoughtfully.
As @happy1 suggested, you should seek help through the link @worriedmomucb provided. There are many talented and experienced volunteers who can guide you more specifically.