would an essay about an event that made me go from a person that is ashamed of his home country to someone who loves it now and wants to make it a better place OK? i feel like it’s kinda cliche
@Study_s, this is a great question to ask during today’s live session with Admissions Officers. You can just type it in the thread below and it will get answered at 7pm ET:
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I think the goal is always to make the reader think, “This is a great kid, the exact sort of kid we want in our college community.” To that end, you want to show, not tell, them what you are like as an individual person, and help create a vivid picture in their mind of what you would be like as a member of a college community.
Loving your country can be a virtue, but it does not necessarily stand out as something very personal, and I am not sure it is going to paint that picture of their mind of you as a member of their college community. Maybe you can modify this idea to be more about your love of local communities?
Or perhaps the OP is already taking some steps towards this goal that could demonstrate what kind of person the OP is? Some kind of volunteering/service or something along those lines.
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Perhaps the focus of your essay could be on the transformation you experienced. What made your feelings change? Does your new outlook align with your overall character growth over the last few years? Is it informed by any of the learning (in or out of class) or EC’s you’re doing?
Really any topic is fine – it is all about how you write it and what it says about you as an individual.
IMO the goal of an admission essay is to say something positive about yourself that can’t be found elsewhere on the application – it should give admission officers a reason to want you on their campus.
I always suggest students start with an outline or draft essay and see how it turns out. CC does have some people willing to proofread an essay.
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Great topic as it affords an opportunity for you to demonstrate personal growth and share insights which led you to change your thoughts about something (in this case the something is your home country).
In short, growth & insights are an effective way to sell yourself.
P.S. There is a technique that can be used in this type of essay that many elite law schools use as an indicator of intellectual depth. Should come naturally so no need to spell it out, but you are on the right track.
I like the topic and don’t think it’s a cliche.
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okay great thank you SO much!!
Also, what would be a good way to end this essay? do u think ending the essay with how i want to help my country would make a good ending?
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