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Essay Tips to Consider

intparentintparent Registered User Posts: 35,291 Senior Member
edited July 2017 in College Essays
One mistake I see repeatedly is students who feel that they MUST answer the prompt as closely as possible. They have been dutifully trained to do so their whole lives. It is what gets you an A in school. But this is the one time when that isn't necessarily the best policy.

Remember this:
- The admissions officer reading your essay did not write the prompts. Their goal really isn't to know the answer to the prompt. It is to know you.
- The question they are trying to answer is what else is there to you that doesn't show up in the rest of the app that should make them want you on campus? The essay is what makes you 3D to them. It is a chance to show them what makes you tick and what could make you a positive addition to their campus.
- Sure, you need to loosely answer one of the prompts. But figure out what you want to tell, then fit it to a prompt.
- A great essay can turn on a small thing. One of my kids had an essay published as an example of "how to" for college essays. It included a description of trying out her foreign language skills on the host family's dog in a foreign country -- it was only a part of the essay, but it had some self deprecating humor that I think really made the essay. My other kid wrote about how she has secretly been imitating a famous literary figure since middle school with some serous and some funny results. She got in everyplace she applied, including some top schools, even with a slightly soft GPA.
- Those poor admissions officers read hundreds of essays on the same prompts every year. Unless you have a whale of a sob story (immigrant boat people or homelessness type big), my advice is to look for something positive to write about. Things that seem huge to a teen (secrets about sexuality, overly religious parents, abusive parents, etc) are not uncommon themes, but also don't really make you stand out in a positive way.
- Anything about mental health is a bad topic. Even if you think you've licked it, they know it could come back. And they would rather not deal with that on campus.
- The admissions officer has to meet with the team and make a case for you. They'll shorthand you as they debate it -- it is probably better to be the "kid who loves reciting Chaucer " than the "depressed kid from Connecticut".
- Teens are notoriously terrible at judging the quality of their essays and how they will come across. They are also awful judges of whether any humor they've included is funny to an adult. Get an adult editor who has some understanding of the admissions process.
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Replies to: Essay Tips to Consider

  • kspoffkspoff Registered User Posts: 29 New Member
    If you had to recommend a number of proofreader/quality checks for an essay, what would it be?
  • LindagafLindagaf Registered User Posts: 8,360 Senior Member
    My kid had two readers who suggested edits, but she also let her friends read it. IMO, that's pointless. Teen friends rarely give honest or helpful critiques.

    I would say two or three people max. Too many cooks in the kitchen otherwise.
  • ceomommy21ceomommy21 Registered User Posts: 24 Junior Member
    Thanks @intparent for these suggestions. You mentioned "Anything about mental health is a bad topic. Even if you think you've licked it, they know it could come back. And they would rather not deal with that on campus." ---- but what about mental health not of our D but that D became the "go-to-to-seek-advice or go-to-to-seek-refuge" from D's friends? Can D use this experience to show how she failed to help her friends but at the same time time when she learned more about herself and how this experience sparked her interest in pursuing a career to address such issues?
  • AboutTheSameAboutTheSame Registered User Posts: 2,993 Senior Member
    @ceomommy21 : I think that has the potential to be an excellent essay.
  • intparentintparent Registered User Posts: 35,291 Senior Member
    Yes, as long as the essay is more about herself and doesn't reveal too much personal info about others, that could be good. What they are wary of is a kid's own mental health issues cropping up again.
  • ceomommy21ceomommy21 Registered User Posts: 24 Junior Member
    Thanks @AboutTheSame and @intparent

    So we got our D's essay looked into by her English AP teacher and he did gave a few points to consider which I thought was helpful. My D thankfully heed his advice. Then one of my husband's friend reviewed it (friend works at a college admission office -- D not applying there) and was highly critical about D's essay to the point that friend wanted D to start from scratch.

    Now, the last pair of eyes that had reviewed D's essay is from a consulting firm that we paid for to help us with the whole college process --- and the reviewer's comments and (suggested edits) on D's essay was that it was a great essay with minor "mistakes".

    Who do we believe in? I guess it all depends now on whose desk Ds essay lands or depends I guess on the mood of the admission officer reading Ds essay at that time.
  • preppedparentpreppedparent Registered User Posts: 3,284 Senior Member
    Nice job intparent. Just to add, whatever you write, make sure grammar and spelling are checked. Also, the essay is supposed to be about you. If some one were to pick your essay out of a pile, it's supposed to be unmistakenly yours. It can't be generic to the point, anyone could have written it. Take time to edit and polish. It is well worth the time.
  • intparentintparent Registered User Posts: 35,291 Senior Member
    I guess it depends on what the criticisms of the second reader were. And what kind of role they have in admissions, and whether it is the same type of school your kid is applying to.
  • lookingforwardlookingforward Registered User Posts: 29,970 Senior Member
    edited September 2017
    In the end, letting a kid feel she did her best sometimes outweighs the search for perfection.

    Just remember, it's not some random tale, the point is to show the attributes those colleges want to see. And recent.

    It helps to try to understand what those attributes are. @ceomommy21 she could use that, it could show kind, willing, open, non-judgmental, etc. The self awareness and reflection can be good. But imo, be careful it doesn't somehow portray her as stuck in this role, unable to weigh other priorities, or that it somehow self glorifies. Plus, beyond her own friends, did it lead her to other involvements, impact beyond the close friend circle?

  • ceomommy21ceomommy21 Registered User Posts: 24 Junior Member
    @lookingforward Yes, that is so true. Thanks for the advise. As of now, D is still without an essay that she could call "the one".

    I think the lesson here is that D should just write not to impress or think what the College Admission officers are looking for and just write who she is focusing on her values/attributes.
  • EScottEScott Registered User Posts: 8 New Member
    Really amazing advice intparent. Thanks for for sharing it here.
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